Serene's Poems

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This was created today. Its whats happening at the current moment.

Gone wrong

Tears fell from her cheeks
It was the opposite of what usually happens
The one who is dumped cries, not the dumper
As she looks at the screen tears refresh

She had loved him, never wanted to leave him
Now she is saying goodbye, wishing him to forget
She thought she loved him
But in truth that love was false

He made it so hard, trying to keep her
Threats of death on himself
Thinking maybe he could make her love him with pity
His tries make her heart harden.

He wants her to love him
Tells her she’s the only he loves
He threatens to kill him
And she panics

Calling a friend, she hopes he’ll talk
Off the phone she panics again
He says goodbye
She loses control and cries over a boy’s life about to go to waste
 

Edward Winters

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Nov 30, 2005
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Pretty poem - I like how it's about a serious subject without being overly dramatic about it. (if that makes any sense...) I've known some people roped into relationships because of that... Very nice poem, although it's a tiny bit choppy in parts.

Yeah, I'm bad at reviewing poetry... Sorry. >_>
 
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